Oh no, not another poem from dlp?

This is surreal and I love it. 'Passed the charcoal clouds,mourning the death of the sun garden' another brilliant line but you need to use 'passed', which is the past tense of the verb to pass. Past is either a noun or and adjective. But this is nit picking. Poetry like this is off the wall and mind blowing. It's like 12 tone music, each note its own master and this poem's lines are like that. Each separated from the one before and the one following. Very imaginative.